Wanting You (a poem by Martie Coetser)
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Mornings when the sun warms me
so tender with silver rays of light
and my coldness radiates misty clouds,
I don’t need you, man.
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By noon when I am hot and beaming -
voluptuous brilliance among the stars
where volcano’s erupt in me spontaneously,
I don’t need you, man.
.
When the sun honors me with exquisite colors
to be relished by heavy humid darkness,
I sigh satiated with passionate love -
I don’t need you, man.
.
I am earth; you are human
my love for you is unconditional.
You are the one needing me;
I don’t need you; I simply want you.
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© Martie Coetser
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Thanks, Tammy :) You, too, are awesome for surprising me pronto with a comment :))
Brilliant imagery. Great metaphors. I love it. Thanks for sharing.
That is definitely an interesting poem you've written Martie. Now if I could only figure out what you were talking about, I might have said something different. LOL! :)
That was so sweet. Its much better to want someone than to need them. I wonder how many people will actually get that.
Me right!!?? Oh Martie, I knew you loved me! I just knew it!!
Seriously, this is beautiful, and so far out of my league. When you do it, you do it real good my friend!
jim
wonderful and full of great messages. voted up.
Great images for the mind to savor....nice job!
Excellently composed and brilliant twist at the end, making the whole poem a singular double-entendre. And the message is spot-on!
Up in all categories!
Martie I don't mind saying your one of if not the very best writer of this kind of sentiment and thought on the site. Your guaranteed to raise the blood pressure in a man to unacceptable levels but let it rise and rise again and many more of the like dear lady.
Sista,
You know how to sizzle... and are clearly 'not' from the Victorian days!
Voted Up and Beautiful. Love, Maria
savanahl - Thank you. Good to know you love it.
Cagsil - now I wonder would did you figure out and what would you have said differently if you haven't figure 'that' out? Lol!
Ardie - when a woman loves someone she needs, she is completely vulnerable. That man's comings and goings and doings and sayings affect her severely. When she does not need him, she simply wants and loves him, and even uses him...
I don't say this is the correct way of loving a man; this is about passion that could develop in deep love where a woman and a man love each other because they want to and not because they need to. Take care!
The Man WMP - oh, how would you love to be loved like this? Lol!
Ian - Thank you!
The personification of the earth is wonderful. You have put the message clear.
Love without need, a fantasy indeed. Lovely...
Voted up and beautiful! I love those pics. Now if I got this right this was like putting earth into the role of a woman. Love the flow of the poem.
what a powerful and beautiful poem. loved it! vote way up!!!
A brilliant and descriptive poetic tribute to passion. Almost symbolic with Earth, wind and fire erupting in your soul and showing who really needs who. Man/woman come from the earth, separated they are nothing.
With their combined strengths they can move mountains with their lusts and love for each other. Well done my poetic genius. You moved me.
Vincent said it all, Martie. You are a passionate, beautiful, loving, intelligent, poetic woman who also knows how to write. And write well! Lovely, m'luv. And deserving of an Up!
Beautifully done! I love it!
I tell my husband - want, need and desire are all different things!
Beautiful Poem. I love the photo's too.
billybuc, I wonder how many images could be created in our minds by a poem? And every person will have his own. Thanks!
Charles, I am so glad you've noticed the double entendre. Much appreciated :)
Alastar - what a nice compliment. Thank you. Yes, I also prefer my blood pressure to rise with passion instead of anger :)))
marcoujar, I am a rebel. Women were until recently not allowed to be women; they were suppressed to be the slaves of men and children. Consider me eMANcipated since the beginning of 2011. Hugs galore :)
Good to know, thank you Vinaya!
Love because you want to love versus love because you need to love equals choosers versus beggars and/or givers versus takers. But to be realistic, of course 'need' in humans instigate 'want'. Thank you, Augustine...
Gypsy, you've got it right. But of course of a woman who already has everything she needs, or who has come to terms with her unfulfilled needs.
Thanks you, pickles!
Vincent, I prefer to ignore the fact that humans are in fact parasites on Earth, and many men are the same kind of threat for their women. If man and woman could be one, loving 'themselves' all the time... and their fellowman just the same.... what a heaven life would be! Good to know I've moved you. Take care:)
I love myself through your eyes, drbj. Your comment made me once again realize that we do need the eyes of the beholder to love (or hate) ourselves. Thanks you so much for your support.
RealHousewife - They are, but they do overlap a bit. Thanks for your thought-provoking comment.
Lady_E - good to see you in my corner. Thanks for leaving a comment :)
It made me feel envy - I need and I want something bigger [the first version of "bigger" was "begg..."] than myself, capable of managing the tides and ebbs...
I guess I am in the begging mode - Send me the MAN who can. Because I CANT. I cannot take it alone. I will admit that I need him and I want him and I accept him.
- Auuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu......
Silence came back.
Silence.
The Power of Silence.
The Power is Within You.
The Universe:
"You don't need."
"You don't need."
"Cope."
"Hope".
"Live".
Be alive.
Good-bye.
Martie my friend..I like this. Love without ties, the best kind. To be able to say, " I don't need you. " Awesome feeling...
The world was here before our species, and it will be here after our species dies out. We may fancy ourselves masters of the world, but when it comes down to it, we are just another era of inhabitants on this planet. We should feel loved that the Earth hasn't swallowed us whole yet.
This was lovely. I loved the use of personification and imagery. I voted this up and beautiful. :)
Kallini, my heart goes out to you in your current miserable phase. Just hold on, go with the flow, you will sooner or later wash ashore. And then you will start another new exciting phase.
Of course we are all beggars, we have needs. Blessed is the woman who can be like earth, no longer in need, but able to want... chose.... take...
Take care, my friend. You WILL soon be okay again. Now is the time to organize all your nice memories. Paint them, write them, or just cherish them. Try to focus on the good ones and ignore the bad. Unless you need to clean them :)
Always, yes, we are there where we know we don't need, we simply want. By now we know all the easiest and most uncomplicated ways to fulfill our earthy needs. Take care!
(7:40am>>>>> rushing to work>>>>>>>)
The images you selected go so well with your beautiful words. Let the sun shine!
As others have said, this is beautiful and so well written. It also causes me to think about God. He made mankind because He wants a relationship with us and not because He needs us. As we are made in His image we also want others. Just lovely.
Fantastic Martie! very clever and well chosen images.
voted up, best wishes Lesley
Hahaha, that's lovely.
Phillydreamer - I'm on your page with this. On You-Tube is a brilliant video about this issue - a recording of a TV-program of one of your famous comedians. And now I can't even remember his name. He made fun of the 'Think Green' movement - those who think they can safe Earth by not doing this and that. I wish I could give you the link - it belongs in here. Will search for it later. Thank you so much for coming over for the read.
Ebower - Nice to see you in my corner. I love to use something in nature as metaphors. Thanks for the vote :)
Hi poetvix - I'll do my best. Lol! If not the sun, the moon :))
Hi my dear Hypenbird - Yes, the love that only gives without asking anything in return, except gratefulness. Agapé. And so sad, I know more atheist who are 'representatives of God' - according to their deeds and love and respect for others - as Christians who proclaim to be His representatives. I always appreciate your comments. Thank you :)
Movie Master - always good to see you and your comment. Thanks. Also only best wishes from me to you :)
Thank you, ubanichijioke!
Martie, I don't need you I want you. Lovely. Need is a selfish word. It is related to my needs. But want is a holistic word. It is related to my inner feelings. Want has no desire except to be together. Be it the earth or a man or a woman the feeling is same. Voted up excellent and meaningful.
MAKUSR
makusr, your distinction between need and want makes perfectly sense. Also, if I know I am loved because I am needed, I feel responsible and obliged to meet expectations, while when I know I am wanted, I feel special, honored and grateful, and I know I can be only myself. Thanks for your insightful comment. Take care!
Wow...such a beautiful relation ship between man and our mother Earth. Beautifully expressed, Martie.
Words, Need and Want have also been very well defined :)
Loved it and voting it way up!
Thank you, Ruchira! I love your approval :)
Martie, this sizzles with sensuousness.I love the way the 'wants' and need' are captured and the way the poem flow and the metaphorical relationship between Gaia and man.
I am earth; you are human
my love for you is unconditional.
You are the one needing me, man!
I don’t need you; I simply want you.
Beautiful!
Docmo, what a surprise. So good to see you again! I am trying this genre - poems in the shade of passion and even erotica - since October, so your positive comment means a lot to me. Thanks, and take care :)
Loved this poem. I so agree that healthy love is when a woman and a man love each other because they want to and not because they need to.
I, like Hyphenbird, also took this as a metaphor for God's love for man.
Voted up, useful, awesome, beautiful and interesting.
Happyboomernurse, I treasure your comment and vote, as always. Thanks!
Now this is what I call a poem! It's great to have that wanting feeling. Very different emotion than simply needing someone I always think.
I love that passage
'By noon when I am hot and beaming -
voluptuous brilliance among the stars
where volcano’s erupt in me spontaneously,
I don’t need you, man'
I must check out more of your hubs if they are all as good as this.
Vote up and beautiful!
poshcoffeeco, thank you for the nice surprise - pimping me in HH - You will find on my profile links to similar poems I feel I 'commit' as in murder or some kind of rebellious act. Thanks, also, for the vote :)
What a fantastic poem. Just grabs you. I love your easy and breezy style of writing here. Now a fan, Martie. :)
Welcome in my corner, Astra. I am still awe-struck by your talent and beautiful, subtle sense of humor. Take care!
It's very well done, and so 'Earthy'.
This was beautiful poem, Martie. Excellent and very well written. Good job and rated up!
Blessing,
WillStarr - Lol! Thanks :)
Hi, prasetio, nice to see you! Thank you very much for the compliment and rate. Take care!
Wow this was great and I love your choice of pictures too. Hot, hot, hot!
acaetnna - Thanks a lot. I am absolutely thrilled with such a hot comment from you, the Queen of Love poems :)))
..well I can learn from this - very basic and direct and that is what makes this very much a masterwork - love and lust and affairs of the heart are all very basic and direct emotions I would say and you have captured that essence perfectly here my Muse of Martie and I will see you with this on my Facebook marquee/homepage with a direct link back here - lake erie time 7:07pm
and what I have been meaning to ask you about our new film and music group - I would like to get 100 members in a month or so and with the world time clock on our side I would like to see participation of some kind every hour of the day and night - how can we find more/new members and promote this in such a way - any ideas or suggestions?
Hi my dearest Epi, it is now 2:15am - I've caught up with a lot of reading and commenting in HubPages today and did not spend much time in Facebook. But I was just on my way to have a peep in there.
I believe (hope) you would like the members of the group to be only hubbers, to enjoy closer interactions - like socializing after 'work'. Then I would suggest you keep on asking existing members to recruit their favorite hubbers.
That page of yours was a brilliant idea, my dear flirt buddy. But so was the 'Say something Funny' too. I honestly feel both pages should be built and maintained. We hubbers need music as well as jokes to keep us balanced, don't you agree.
Now let me go have a peep. But only a peep. Or else I am going to be a zombie in office.
Walk tall! You are precious :)
holly Charlize!!
This hub was taking me so long to come down this far!
Love your infatuation and wanting the love that cannot be needed. Great inspiration coming from a vibrant country!
LORD
Love the double-entendre here. You chose your words perfectly, It is sizzling hot. This is absolutely brilliant Martie.
Voting up
Hi Lord, it feels so good to be associated with Charlize. I hope I have inspired you to be magnificently vibrant :)))
Rosemary, thank you so much. Your opinions and votes always mean a lot to me. Take care :)
fantastic work, Martie. I particularly like: "voluptuous brilliance among the stars"
PDXK - thank you, I appreciate your approval. At first I did not like that line very much, but those two words refused to leave the poem and there were no other line available for them. Do words do this to you as well? Sometimes they take over and become a story or poem all on their own.
Thanks again and take care :)
Simply beautiful!
Thank you, Dr. Ope :)
Martie.. I am so glad I can comment.. how beautiful your poems are.. this one so exquisite...
bravo Martie
voted way up
be blessed
Debbie
Hi Debora, you have finally convinced me to enable comments on "The Man In My Dreams". Thank you so much for your encouraging comments. It means a lot to me.
Excellent poem and it's powerful. Enjoyed it very much. Voted Up.
You have nice writing style my friend.
Best Wishes, Kamalesh
Thank you, Kameles, and best wishes for you too :)
Martie, you have blossomed into a beautiful, sensitive poet. I know it has always been simmering under the surface, but now baby, it is great to see you unleash the passion. Beautiful imagery here and a loving message, "I need you." net:) x
Hi Annette, so good to see you. I am so glad I no longer need a man in my life, except when something goes wrong with my car and technical/electronic equipment, but I certainly still want one... Lol!
I believe that most of us need to be wanted, and want to be needed.
Definitely so, Perspycacious. Only some of us eventually reach the stage where we can only want, as if our needs has been fulfilled and wanting is but only taking the opportunity to enjoy what life offers.
Unfortunately there are also those other kind of 'wanters', those who want (and take) with no concept or respect for the needs of Self and others.
tammyswallow Level 8 Commenter 3 months ago
That is fabulous and hot! I don't know a man alive who wouldn't love that for Valentine's Day. Awesome!