The Space of our Love (A Poem)
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A poem in the shade of erotica, published by Augustine A. Zavala, has touched me in many ways. First of all the effect of the poem surprises me –To be honest, it was the first time ever I swallowed my breath (more than once) while reading a poem.
On reviewing I noticed the simplicity of the poem - ordinary, unpretentious words revealing a man’s natural yearning to make love to the woman he desires. Not even between the lines I could detect signs of perversion or chauvinism, which are tendencies of average men that summarily change me into an ice box.
The poem made me realized the preciousness of a relationship between a man and a woman who love and trust each other completely and especially in their most intimate zone.
Romance and erotica are not my fortes; I am too much of a philosopher, moralizer and even dictator. But Augustine A. Zavala’s poem challenged me to come forward with a response.
Let’s see if I am able to respond with flair on his poem.
Please read A.A. Zavala’s poem before mine -
http://aazavala.hubpages.com/hub/Just-tell-me
The Space of our Love
The sound of your voice, my darling,
flows through my veins and melt me for you -
Speak to me, don’t stop, let your words
melt lingering grievances in my heart as well.
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Whisper your sensual desires in my ear
Demand my body, heart and soul
with your hands and lips and titillating tongue
break my resistance and make me your slave.
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Don’t stop, don’t rush, just give me your heart
I need more of your voice and some of your soul
hiding deep in your eyes behind the smouldering lust
of the man in your flesh, the lover I adore.
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I feel, my love, your hands caressing my back
releasing your desires to shiver through my body
Do you feel my hands holding your face
for my lips to explore the contours of your mouth.
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With the tip of my tongue I give you my reins
and the right to fly me to your secret world
where nothing exist except you and I
compatible in the rhythm of love.
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Your hungry kisses reveal your languish
and make me moan with delight
because it’s me you desire and trust while
luxuria devours the power of your mind.
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In your secret world we may loose control
We may laugh, we may cry, we may roar and scream
and break - the space of our love has no boundaries
we may hover forever beyond the end of no end.
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Exploring with you my darling the depths of love
Is all I wish to do every day of my life
Don’t let me go, keep me in your chamber of passion
let us spend our lives in the space of our love.
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© Martie Coetser
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More poems in the shade of erotica
- The Affair Part I by Mamadrama
- Addicted to Love (a poem by Martie Coetser)
- Words of Seduction by Movie Master
- In The Throws... by maggie-may
- A Night for Lovers by Rosemary50
- Seductive Dance by Rosemary50
- Just tell me by a.a.zavala
- Bring In The Clown by thebluestar
- MAKING of love - INTENSE Poem
- Breathing You by Saddlerider
- I Have Loved You for a Thousand Years by sunnieday
- Can you come and play by mckbirds
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Lol, mckbirdbks! Oh my, thanks for making me laugh :))) I believe I may accept your comment as a compliment :))
Gee, Martie, you and Augustine are really heating things up...nice work! WB
A beautifully erotic sensation of a poem.
WHOA.... My toes actually curled.
I have to say that this piece eclipsed my poem and moved the intimate, erotic, and sensual needle off the charts. I have to say that I don't understand why you think you don't have the knack to send a surge of electricity through the body of the most clueless man in the form of prose.
Any man, young and or old, dumb or dumber, has skills or no skills, should read this poem to get a clue on how to create and sustain intimacy. We like to think we know what women want, but come here and read and see if you truly know. Stunning write, I will be drawing the drapes and sitting alone for bit. Continuing to recover from the sensual cascade.
Wayne Brown – I could not resist the challenge, and I must say I’ve enjoyed the write. Just not sure about the word ‘titillating’ – its connotations? So I hope somebody will tell me. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Rosemay50 – Oh my, this is like walking on thin ice. I know just one word can change it from classy to pleb – and not necessarily by me, but by the reader and his/her perception of a word or entire phrase. Therefore I really appreciate your comment. Thanks!
Beautiful, sensuous and erotic. I love A.A.'s poem and I love yours and also the tribute to him that prefaces this poem.
Agree with everything A.A. wrote in his comment and if poor Mckbirdbks does have a heart attack, you may just be responsible! (smile)
Voted up across the board (included funny because of the comment from Mckbirdbks.)
What a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing it.
Martie got her groove and it shimmers and glows..
You tell it like it is and it explicitly flows
Like sweet red wine that was left to age
You opened the door wide to exit the cage
I feel a sweltery adventure is just over the hill
Now if we can just find old Slick to foot the bill
Your poetry of love sizzled off the page
Soon your passionate novels will be all the rage....
It takes a travel back in time to remember Slick, Hee
Cheers.....
A.A. Zavala – I’m smiling-smiling-smiling. Really thrilled because I’ve managed to curl your toes :)) Shall we call it revenge?
Augustine, as a writer I am very much like a woman giving birth to a child – never 100% sure if the baby will be healthy and without any deformities. I must say after this one I feel inspired to write another 2-3, keeping Song of Songs in mind – maybe a trilogy. Maybe the next one about the lover’s looks... ‘Beauty is in the eye of the beholder’.
Mmmm...
Thanks for the inspiration, and thanks for being such an awesome lover in Cyberspace... :)))))
Oh my, I’m actually blushing :)) I’m covering my face with a pillow :)
Happyboomernurse – It is so good to know you’ve enjoyed this. Must say I’ve published it with a bouncing heart – really felt like walking on thin ice – and then up came Mckbirdsbks comment – I almost giggled myself off my chair. I’m still laughing. Thanks for your lovely comment :))
always exploring – my sweet friend, what a wonderful talent you have to comment in the format of a rhyming poem AND to simultaneously say exactly what you want to say. Mmm, thinking of Slick... he was arrogant; he took me for granted, and that’s why I’ve popped those sleeping pills in his drink :)))
Thanks, Ruby. I really appreciate your support.
WOW My fav writer you did it again. Love it Love it Love it. I believe this is what teh Lord intended in a union with man and wife. Beautiful. Hugs sister.
I've linked the hubs togethor so that we can create a synergistic effect of intimacy and sensuality. Still tingling...
This is really good! Usually not my kind of poetry, but you were able to portray it in a beautifully dictated and classy way. Definitely voted up and keep up the great work!
Martie my dear friend, you have replied to Augustine in the most wonderful way. His poem stirred us all with the beauty of his words.You have withheld your gift of sensual poetry under a bushel. Beautifully written. xx
Whooohooo, you go girlfriend!! It is true that "50" is the new "20" after reading "this right up in here...!"
While I only had a few private "thoughts" in response to AAZ's sweetly formatted poetry, you have developed a masterpiece that speaks for so many of us women! These two poems are a duet and I would love to see them published, with others by you both! I would consider you, Martie and Augustine a "master blend"!
Along with Gail (and because I am still laughing from Mike's comment), I voted UP & across the board, mar.
skye – Hi, my always-sparkling friend. I agree with you – Making love to someone you love with all you heart has a sacred depth many people never discover in their lives. The fact that you love this poem, Patti, means that I’ve successfully managed to ‘paint’ a picture of a woman who truly loves her lover. Thanks a lot for your comment.
A.A. Zavala – I’ve inserted the most famous love scène in here – Patrick Swayze and Demi Moore in ‘Ghost’. Of course blushing, but why not rub it in while I have the opportunity?
Although I’m blushing all the way I must give the two of us an A+. We’ve created a beautiful scène of a man and a woman in a fabulous relationship. All my compliments to you, for your poem is absolutely awesome. Another very special and adorable male quality you have exposed in your poem came to mind, and this will surely crumbles the heart of most women: A man’s true and honest confession that he NEEDS the woman he loves, her voice in his ear and her arms around his head, etc – opposed to the arrogant approach of most men - that they have a birth-right to take a woman whenever they get horny. Swallowing my breath... blushing.... Oh my, it is too easy to be open and honest all alone in my cozy home, facing only a computer screen :)))
OutsideTheLines – I appreciate your opinion tremendously. Thank you so much for posting it.
thebluestar – I’m so happy to know you like this, Annette. I was really not sure about this... When one writes about love, and especially about making love, you are in the twilight zone between sensualism and vulgarism. Just one wrong word and you’re out. And you know English is not my native tongue! Though I must say it is much easier to write sensual in English than in my mother-tongue, Afrikaans. The words in our language vocabulary are really in my opinion too harsh and vulgar to describe intimate actions – as it is in Dutch and German as well. Thanks so much for your support :))
Martie, dear -
The 'rhythm of love' that you wrote about above
Has titillated me beyond description.
If one needed a guideline for loving another
This work of art is the perfect prescription.
Writing this comment is titillating me even further, i.e., that is 'exciting pleasurably.' Thank you, thank you. :)
Got a cigarette?
marcoujor – (giggles) ... What shall I say? Some men are simply irresistible.... (Pulling up my shoulders :))
What? Augustine and I a master blend.......
(I swallowed all my breath... using a Chinese fan to get some air in my lungs..... :)))
I may ask him to collaborate with me to modernize Song of Songs. That specific book in the Bible was regarded as erotica at the time of its writing. Unfortunately translations and outdated metaphors had ruined it for us.
I hope Mike is okay – For all I know he if 95 years old. Oh my, poor Mike :)))
Thanks a lot for your much appreciated support, mar. Take care ;-)
I loved this! Very descriptive and sensual! Voted up!
drbj – Receiving such an awesome report from the rector of the FU University, makes me the happiest and best titillated lecturer of Sexophone in the universe. Thank you, thank you, thank you :)))
Hyphenbird – He-he! (I love your new avatar.)
Hear Me – Thank you so much. Your opinion really means a lot to me. Expect me in your corner – I’m looking forward to meet you properly.
...there must be something in the air these days at Hubville with all of this love and lust flowing through our poetic veins - even the epi-man has been jumping head first into the warm inviting waters of the lovey dovey game - lol - and you why we lead this pack, this vanguard, this zeitgeist at this moment, because we are the beautiful ones ........
lake erie time ontario canada 12:29pm and on that note time to jump into the lake ...... to cool off ........it's getting hot in here ........my boxer shorts are on fire ....lol lol
perhaps MCKBIRDBKS should add another installment - Orgy in the backroom at the EMERALD WELLS CAFE
Epi – Emotions is contagious – So rather get infected with love as with anything else, I say. I hope you are not too hot for that lake – I can see a cloud of steam rising in the air up there :-) Mckbirdbks is a brilliant writer – it will be interesting to read his idea of sensualism.
Did you receive my email? I need your approval to use one of your epigrams in a story I want to submit for the contest.
Thanks for reading and commenting, Epi. I will catch up with yours before the end of this day.
SA - 7:15pm
Wowowo!!!
The most voluptuous,sizzling thing i have read till date..
Intense Intimate And Beautiful Martie.;)
This is an intense and beautiful poem, Martie. I love your choice of words. Your poem and Augustine's are wonderful complements to each other - each full of vivid and sensual images. I will be reading your poem many times!
"we can hover forever beyond the end of no end"...is such sweet, gorgeous verbiage. Its what we all long for, but, alas, although I recognize it here, it remains rare. Between you and Augustine, you've got me chain smoking! True art, Martie...
Little sista I knew you had it in ya. Finally let it out, what has your new Welsh friend unleashed in you? LoL I loved it and I felt your sensuality exploding in the privacy of a candle lit bedroom. You are a very erotic and romantic woman I see and feel.
Between the three of your poems. A.A. and Annette's I hit a boiling point, had to run for a cold shower and a cold beer to clear up my dry throat from the heat bestowed upon it in all your verses. I love your art, keep painting with such vivid and bright colors please. LoL....hugs from big brother.
supriya18 – Oh my, you inspires me to write novels for Mills & Boons. Thanks a lot!
Mentalist acer – Your comment finally encourage me to explore the genre of romance fiction. I guess all I need is a long list of sensual words. Thank you so much!
AliciaC – I don’t have words to say how much I appreciate your comment. I’m totally overwhelmed by all these encouraging comments in here. I thank you, Alicia, out of my heart :))))
Amy Becherer – A lack of time, responsibilities and fatigue are normally the spanners in the works. Or pure ignorance. For me there is nothing more humiliating than a ‘quickie’, so.... I’m a good girl, looking forward to another holiday with David.... :)))
saddlerider1 – Now what shall I say.... (blushing). A woman’s passion should never be underestimated. Too often you’ll find more passion in a woman who appears to be hard and cold as in a sexy, smoldering blonde. I do believe there is a time and a place for everything, and I have a rule: “Do what you do do well, girl...”
Thanks a million for your encouraging comments, my big brother. You’ve encouraged me to write poems, and no you are pushing me on to the genre of erotica.... Mmmm.... I wonder how much money one can make in this genre?
Hugs going your way :)))
Amazing Martie! Understated and powerful words together make one hot bit of poetry! Up and awesomely beautiful!
I had not read Augustine A. Zavala, I followed your advice and found Just Tell Me is a beautiful poem.
Your poem evoked very pleasant feeling.
Martiie, you've certainly touched upon the real 'hot spots' for a woman, which are always a mixture of senses, mind and body making a total response capable of carrying us away into a different sphere than the ordinary everyday. Very well done. Your choice of that beautifully erotic "Ghost" love scene and music make for a perfect illustration. When both partners are caught up in it to the same realm, it is truly magic.
I happened to have watched "Titanic" again earlier in the evening and its love scenes between Kate Winslet's and Leionardo di Caprio's characters have a similar combination of passion, purity and discovery, though not quite as erotic as Patrick's and Demi's here. The tragedy in each of the stories possibly intensifies the impact of the love, as well.
To take a walk through your mind, it's a wonderful place to go Martie, Beautiful.
Dave xx
Martie this was truly very beautiful and you descibed a wonderful warm encounter..I gave A.A a little tease with a comment but I have to say A.A. you and Net have done so well with bringing out another side to writing that I also have never touched on. It was done in such good taste, full of emotion and intrigue. Warmed the very soul.I am such a romantic at heart and this made my heart fill with joy as I believe it is every womans desire somewhere deep down inside to be loved deeply and without reservation.
Great job,
Sunnie
Chatkath – I’m so glad to know you enjoyed this one. The write was quite an awesome experience too... picking and choosing words... I’ve decided to keep it simple... I must say the word ‘titillating’ is still bothering me.... There must be a more sensual word.... It will come to me in time. Thanks for your support :)))
Sunshine of your love for sure with the two companion poems of yours and Augustine Martie. My gosh but you both have brought this subject to a high art form here on the HP. Tastefully erotic and so very fine this extraordinary poem.
Vinaya Ghimire – Thanks for telling me. Women’s basic desire to be intimate is pure and unselfish; they don’t ask much – only true love.
Nellieanna – I love the way you stress the result of a man’s actions to be - ‘carrying us away into a different sphere than the ordinary everyday.’ There are so many things keeping a woman stuck in the ordinary everyday. Men must realize the power of their voices and words. Talking to a woman, telling her she is needed and beautiful and why, is certainly today the best way to get her in ‘the cave’.
Before I experienced true love for the first time (in my thirties), romantic scenes in movies irritated the living daylight out of me. I associated all kisses and hugs with sex... “OMW, there they go again.... animals!” were my thoughts. But thanks to that very special man, who had really loved me with all his heart, I’ve learnt to distinguish between beautiful love-scenes and love-poetry and common yielding to the demands of the crocodile brain.
Thanks so much for sharing your opinion about intimacy with us, Nellieanna. I will never stop praising you for being you - my mother in Cyberspace :))))
Dave – Now what shall I say to you without saying what I really want to say? Oh, just Skype me, let me here your voice :))))
Sunnie Day – Your approval of this poem really means a lot to me. Loving a man and allowing a man to love us is a ‘holy’ issue for us women. It is very difficult to explain our needs and desires with words. Only one word can ruin our fantasy – our idea of perfect intimacy. It is important for men to realize how much we treasure their touches and on what high pedestal we see them as lovers. Thank you so much for your kind and profound comment.
Alastar Packer – I never-ever thought I would be able to write a poem like this. Blame it on Augustine; he seduced me ))) But so we inspire each other to explore all genres. Writing tasteful/classy/idyllic erotic is certainly the most difficult to do; I am sure here are many writers who can beat this first effort of mine by far. It is so good to know your opinion about these poems is positive, Alastar. Thanks a lot.
Thanks, dear Martie. How good that you're able to let go of the negative connotations & effects which turned you inside out and against a part of your being.
But now, here you are, only to blossom more beautifully than ever, and the better for personal knowledge of the difference between experiences so that the wonderful is truly wonderful and the other needn't haunt you. Your poetry here is not only a lovely expression of your feelings of love, but a triumphant victory over forces that inhibited them for too long. Hugs, dear one!
Yee-Ha Martie!!!
Kaboomp-Kaboomp....
KABOOMP..
Pearldiver.... lol! Since when are you a jumping dragon-kangaroo?
what a great poem and fitting song. such a pleasure.
thelyricwriter - Nice to meet you! Thanks for coming over for the read. I'm so glad you've found it a pleasure. I'm looking forward to read your work as well.
Hi, Wow! it seems you have got the men drooling here! lol fantastic poem, and dare I say romantic? with a hint of sensual, wish I could write a poem like this! great stuff, cheers nell
Oh Martie, this is very very sensual and I just love it! Whoever started this erotic poetry on Hubpages should be rewarded (and I hope very nicely). Thank you for the lovely twist to my Friday evening :)
Nell Rose – This is my first try, so why don’t you give it a try? It is not that easy to find the right words to keep erotica on the sensual side of hard porn. The latter disgust me, but I do appreciate soft and sensual erotic writings. And really, words are absolutely powerful in this genre. Sadly words that may disgust one, may not disgust another. Even lyrical words, describing the spade not as a spade but as a metaphor of some kind, can be disgusting. Very-very thin ice to walk on here. I’m giving erotica another go in a short-story. So hold your thumbs for me. I really-really don’t want to reduce lovemaking to a common activity on the same level as sport and drugs. In my eyes it is supposed to be a special and almost sacred interaction between two souls and not only two bodies. Thanks for leaving your opinion, Nell. Much appreciated!
SilverGenes – Since I’ve met you in Hubs your opinion means a lot to me, and I am really extremely glad to know you regard this 1st try of mine in this genre as sensual. A.A. Zavala had started it with his poem ‘Just tell me’. It hit me for a six and so I’ve decided to respond with some female expectations and desires. Then thebluestar responded with ‘Bring in the clown’.... and that was the beginning. Last October we were doing Halloween.... and now this year we see fires of love all over the show... :)))) So when will we see yours?
What a sensual encore to Augustine's, very nice indeed--great writing!!
Amazing and here's to so many more to share on here.
I often ask myself "What did I do before HubPages?"
I'm not sure it seems like a long time ago now;another world.
You are a brillant writer hence the long list of comments,I thought I'd never get through them-lol-
Take care and have a great day.
Eiddwen.
...I just wish there were 'space in your love for me' - and yes my contribution to the erotica challenge has been posted and it has 'cancer' in its title - please take time to drop for a nice cuppa tea - I've got some hot buttered scones waiting for you.
lake erie time ontario canada 1:18pm
Maggie-May – Thanks for you kind comment. I’ve just read your contribution and were truly impressed.
Eiddwen – I love living in Hubland. I feel at home and inspired to learn and write and to share all my efforts in all genres with everybody and all. I just love... adores my fellow-hubbers. In my country writers are reserved and stingy with their thoughts and especially with their compliments, unless they get paid to present it or regard it as part of their marketing strategy. Many are down-right rude towards each other. In our country professional snobbism thrives in all sectors. So I am truly extremely happy in Hubland. Thanks a lot for your compliments and for being one of my dearest friends.
epigramman – Oh, how would I love to have a nice cuppa tea with you, enjoying a view on your lake, listening to your music and analyzing the personalities of your 4-legged friends. Oh, and those hot buttered scones.... mmmm with strawberry jam and cream? Let me call my pilot.... it is time for him to take me to Canada :-)) But first things first - let me go read your poem :)))
You bring words to life with your wonderful piece of poetry. A masterpiece and classy. Well done
ubanichijioke - Thank you so much for the compliment. It is good to know I've managed to make a reader experience a moment or two of reality with merely words.
Oh this was done, ever so beautifully! Who is to say this is not your fort? You excel at it my lady. Wonderful, absolutely wonderful!
QudsiaP1 - Welcome in my corner, and especially in this section. Well, I guess one should never say 'I can't' just because he thinks he can't. I've surprised myself with this one and regard all the lovely comments as an inspiration to explore the genre. I'm actually excited - for all I know this is my forte and I never knew it? Mmmm, just figure: "Martie Coetser, famous writer of Erotica." Oh my, here I blush again. Thanks for you kind comment :))
Hello Martie Ma'am! Wonderful poem. I feel so sorry that I had not been able to spot this Hub. Thanks for sharing.:)
voted up, beautiful, awesome.
with lots of Love & Respect
from SHANAYA:)
Shanaya - So glad you've found me and that you like this 1st try of mine in erotic. I'm hopping over to see what's cooking in your corner :))
Oh Martie, this is so sensual, I was there in the moment...
Looking through the comments, I was jolted back to reality when I spotted Hypenbird asking for a cigarette!
Seriously though, it's a masterpiece and I'm voting up!
Thank you so much for including my link.
Best wishes MM
Movie Master - Me too, still laughing about that cigarette - and also mckbird's (the 1st one) So nice to meet you via Maria. My toes are still curling in your poem. Classy, refined, subtle... phewww :))) I love it like that :)
Wow what a "Hot" poem. Sorry I can't leave a longer comment as I need to shut down my laptop as it is steaming up :)
Susan - LOL! I hope your laptop has not suffered permanent damage :))
Wow so intense and completely beautiful. Off now for a wonderful bath with my man!!
acaetnna - I will eat my heart out while I have a shower all by myself @ 2am :((
Beautiful Hub
Thank you, traslochimilano :))
mckbirdbks Level 8 Commenter 7 months ago
What are you trying to do, give me a heart attack?